(Hollow)
No light of the moon.
Heart beats cracking the dark night.
A hollow behind.
(Waiting)
You… not saying words.
Stars… not in the position.
Should I wait forever?
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(Hollow)
No light of the moon.
Heart beats cracking the dark night.
A hollow behind.
(Waiting)
You… not saying words.
Stars… not in the position.
Should I wait forever?
Comments are closed.
Balqis
I’m enjoying this. So beautifully written. I’m trying to understand the meanings behind it.
Keep on writing your Haiku. I’ll be coming back for more. :)
jyotsna
no light of the moon..hollow… suitable background ! dark ! hollow!
it goes well with your words! nice! :)
why didn’t you try background for your other haiku’ ?
Omo
@jyotsna I’ll try to brush them too, didn’t think before though! Nice to know it looks fit!
@Balqis Thank you! I just learned few days back what is haiku- still wondering. :)
Odliam
Nice!
“Waiting” awoke in me the horoscope feeling! :)
Omo
Yay- stars in the position? ;)
odliam
Yeah! Stars… unless you are referring to NASA? :) :P
Rose
I just found your blog on bloggers and I think it’s great! This haiku is beautifully written. It’s amazing how so much feeling/emotion can come from such a short phrase. Great job… I’ll be checking in for more!
Omo
Thank you! You inspiring to try more. Looking forward to see you more.
kitty
“Waiting”…hmmm very nice ! made me to read between wai/ting ;)
Omo
Between wai/ting- what you find? Hollow? :D
YaGirlNextDoor
I love waiting. I see you are really getting the hang of it.
Harish Iyengaar
I like Hollow :)
Omo
Thanks Harish, It’s nice to meeting you. Keep coming please. ;)
Mr. MakingUsmile
I’m inspired to figure out where you are going with this. Thank you for making me smile.
Mr. MakingUsmile