Haiku – Round 2

(The Truth)
I’m disappointed.
You living into my dream.
But I don’t want to.

(Desire)
Your smile sweet sunshine.
Your eyes whisper love story.
I want to forget.

(Eternity)
You do not exist.
We no longer together.
Lost love, let me live.

© Moonomo, 2010

9 Comments

  1. Wow man! You really got the élan of it!

    Touching!, it is a rare thing to find good subjects for anyone just starting to write these difficult poems! Or you already know them?

    You strum a special chord with your “Eternity”, I lost my life some years ago, and it calls for a thin thread that still tugs my soul towards that place with no time…

    Sorry, didn’t mean to be emo, but could not help it! Forget this slip.

    Your work is good, keep it alive!

  2. Omo

    It’s over 10 years now, I tried articles/story but not English poem.

    It’s one of those you write without much thinking- I guess I’ve some understanding about good subjects. ;)

    Thanks a lot, friend. I appreciate you.

  3. Great job. You have really gotten a grasp on it. Well done!!

    1. Omo

      Thank you, Karen! Those of your Haiku cracked me. Your explanation of Haiku lead me to try.

  4. sudheera

    wow!!! nice post moon…

  5. This is a good one. I see that you are a fast learner. Keep it up!

    1. Omo

      Thank you for your kind words. Keep coming. :)

  6. Omo, I’m really enjoying your Haiku! This is another excellent work. I love the trio that speak your feelings. So, well-expressed!

    Now, I understand why I missed this. I was a new member of bloggers then. I’m exploring your blog now! :)

    1. Omo

      Honestly this was my first try to bind the flow into haiku! Thank you! :)

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