Hollow
No light of the moon.
Heart beats cracking the dark night.
A hollow behind.
Waiting
You… not saying words.
Stars… not in the position.
Should I wait forever?
Oct 9th, 2010
Haiku – Round 4
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I’m enjoying this. So beautifully written. I’m trying to understand the meanings behind it.
Keep on writing your Haiku. I’ll be coming back for more. :)
no light of the moon..hollow… suitable background ! dark ! hollow!
it goes well with your words! nice! :)
why didn’t you try background for your other haiku’ ?
@jyotsna I’ll try to brush them too, didn’t think before though! Nice to know it looks fit!
@Balqis Thank you! I just learned few days back what is haiku- still wondering. :)
Nice!
“Waiting” awoke in me the horoscope feeling! :)
Yay- stars in the position? ;)
Yeah! Stars… unless you are referring to NASA? :) :P
I just found your blog on bloggers and I think it’s great! This haiku is beautifully written. It’s amazing how so much feeling/emotion can come from such a short phrase. Great job… I’ll be checking in for more!
Thank you! You inspiring to try more. Looking forward to see you more.
“Waiting”…hmmm very nice ! made me to read between wai/ting ;)
Between wai/ting- what you find? Hollow? :D
I love waiting. I see you are really getting the hang of it.
I like Hollow :)
Thanks Harish, It’s nice to meeting you. Keep coming please. ;)
I’m inspired to figure out where you are going with this. Thank you for making me smile.
Mr. MakingUsmile